Writing & Editing


A few years back Jennifer Ashley and I did a workshop on Title & Premise and how writers could get the interest of editors, agents or readers before they even started the book.  Today, I want to concentrate on the title part. 

A lot of writers skip skip working on a title or figure that it’s not that important because it’s only likely to change anyway.  And while it’s true that the writing is what will sell your book, the title can lay a lot of groundwork for you. 

I’ll never forget the day colleague Chris Keeslar swung by my office all excited: “I just got this proposal called THE STRANGELY BEAUTIFUL TALE OF MISS PERCY PARKER. I haven’t even started it yet, but don’t you just love that title?”  Fortunately, Leanna Renee Hieber‘s writing lived up to it. 

A good title will:

  • Indicate the genre
  • Give a sense of the tone
  • Provide continuity for similar/series titles
  • Intrigue the reader

Julie Kenner (The Givenchy Code, Carpe Demon) and Katie MacAlister (Love in the Time of Dragons; Sex, Lies and Vampires) are some of my ultimate heroes when it comes to clever titles.  But a title doesn’t have to be particularly clever or humorous.  Because, remember, it has to fit the tone of the book.

How to come up with a good title:

  • Figure out what best conveys your style. Is it sexy? Funny? Dark? (all three?) Are you trying to convey a certain time period? 

Let’s use Jennifer Ashley’s paranormal-historical Nvengarian series as an example.  Our theme: Fairy Tales

  • Brainstorm lists of words that convey the style you’ve chosen.

-         Prince Charming, Once Upon a Time, Happily Ever After

  • Start playing around with those words and combining them with other aspects that make your work unique. Look for rhymes, alliteration, wordplay. Keep in mind that it needs to be able to fit on a mass-market cover and still have room for the art.

-         Penelope & Prince Charming has great alliteration and works in the fairy-tale theme.

-         The second book in the series was tougher. Nothing in the list above sounded original enough.  So Jennifer concentrated on the time period with a rhyme and came up with The Mad, Bad Duke.  It’s clearly Regency set–a play on Lady Caro Lamb’s words about Byron “He was mad, bad, and dangerous to know”—which Regency readers recognize.  It also sounds playful and sexy.

-         With the third book featuring a fun-loving Scot, we came up with Highlander Ever After, again pulling in that fairy-tale theme.

     

Where to find inspiration for your titles:

  • imdb.com – The Internet Movie Database
  • your CD collection
  • rhyming dictionaries
  • regular dictionary
  • advertising slogans

Most of all, brainstorming should be a fun process, not a hair-pulling one–even if it feels like it sometimes.  Just stick with it,  don’t be afraid to ask everyone you know for suggestions, and go with what feels good.

And a totally shameless plug that has more to do with art than titles: Check out Jennifer’s PRIDE MATES on Clash of the Covers this week.

Editors and agents are forever telling writers to give us something fresh, something new, something we haven’t seen before.  But then again, you don’t want to be too different.  Because there still has to be a kernel of familiarity in there to remain accessible to the readers. 

I was so excited about the new version of Robin Hood with Russell Crowe because I thought it would be the perfect balance of a familiar story with a new twist—billed as a prequel to the Robin Hood legend we all know.  Unfortunately, after reading a number of tepid reviews, it’s unlikely I’ll go see the movie.  The key elements of what makes Robin Hood so enjoyable—namely the slightly cocky attitude and the genuine sense of fun—seem to be missing from the movie.  I have no problem with gritty, but it also needs to be balanced with light. 

So the lesson here: If you’re going to take a familiar theme and twist it, first figure out the main elements of what makes that theme so popular and enjoyable.  Keep those!  Then twist the character or the setting or add an unexpected piece from another recognizable theme or story.

Figuring out these elements will then making pitching your project a breeze.  “It’s this but with a dash of that and set in there.”  Of course, once you come up with the right juxtaposition you have to deliver.

One project I recently acquired is a perfect example.  At the moment, we’re tentatively calling it NO PROPER LADY (April 2011) and it’s by debut author Isabel Cooper.  The juxtaposition: “Terminator” meets “My Fair Lady.”  Every time I say it in the office, people raise their eyebrows, but they always want to hear more.

Last year, New York Times best-selling author Brenda Novak raised more than $280,000 in her online auction to benefit diabetes research.  And this year she’s set the bar even higher.  Because Brenda is the consummate achiever (seriously, there’s nothing this woman can’t do!) and she has loads of amazing offerings at this year’s auction, I have no doubt she’ll hit her goal. 

The 2010 auction is now live.  For writers, there are 60 agent evaluations up for grabs and nearly 50 editor evaluations.  

If you’re the winning bidder on mine, you’ll receive a line edit of your cover letter, first three chapers and synopsis; a written overall critique of strengths and weaknesses and suggestions for improvement; and a follow-up phone call, should you wish you ask further questions.  Bidding goes through May 31.

There are also loads of ARCs, signed books, handbags, jewelry, art, an iPad, a Nook, and a load of other amazing items, including special promo opportunities for published writers.

Since we’re still not too far out of  the season for resolutions, why not try a few of these on for size.  You’ll be every editor’s fantasy come true.

  • Turn in your best work possible. Some authors under contract submit a draft at deadline–they figure there are going  to be revisions anyway, so they’ll just do all the revising at the same time.  Not really cool.  The more finalized your work, the more I can hone in on what needs to be changed, and–better yet–what doesn’t.  If you have questions or hit a stumbling block as you go, I always find it’s easier to call and we can brainstorm through any plot points together.
  • Speaking of deadlines…meet them.  Obviously, life happens sometimes and deadlines need to be changed; that’s ok.  Just keep us in the loop and everyone can adjust accordingly.  It’s when projects are consistently late that things get to be a problem.  If you show yourself to be a reliable author, you’re more likely to be considered for special projects like anthologies and continuity series.
  • Ask questions.  I often don’t know what you don’t know. Please don’t be afraid to drop me an email if there’s something on your mind. 
  • Be realistic in your expectations.  If you don’t know what this means, Ms. I Want To Be On Oprah, see above. 
  • Strive to get better with every book.

I’ve been meaning to do a post on grammar for a while.  But, man, grammar is just so boring.  Copyblogger found a way to jazz it up a little with the Inigo Montoya Guide to 27 Commonly Misused Words.  I highly recommend checking it out.  And a few of my own to add:

*lightening vs. lightning - Lightening makes something lighter. Lightning is the flash in the sky; there is no e.  Ever. 

*vise vs. vice – A vise squeezes something (i.e. a viselike grip). A vice is an unhealthy habit.  I saw a heroine “in the vice of fear” in a book I was reading on the subway this morning and it completely pulled me out of the story.

*Then is not a conjunction like and and but. If you have two complete sentences on each side, you need to make them two separate sentences or put in a semicolon.  
      *Wrong: I will go to the store, then I will make dinner.
      *Right: I will go to the store. Then I will make dinner.
             or: I will go to the store, then make dinner

In small doses, grammar isn’t so bad, right?

 

Executive Editor Don D’Auria acquires horror, thrillers and Westerns, but his take here on the rejection/acquisition process holds  true for many editors, no matter what the genre.   This column originally appeared in issue #61 of Cemetery Dance magazine.

Welcome to the first installment in what I hope will be an interesting column for anyone who’s curious about publishing seen from an editor’s perspective.  I wouldn’t presume to say that I can speak for all editors.  I’ll write about things as I see them.  I edit a mass market paperback line of horror novels.  Magazine editors or editors who work in the small presses will possibly have very different opinions.  But I think we all see the same sorts of things.

One thing I hope to do in this column from time to time is answer questions that writers or readers have about the whole editorial process.  So often what editors do is unseen or misunderstood.  People tend to see the results of what editors do, but not the way it’s done or the reasoning involved.  So if I can, I’d like to open the door a little, to let folks see what’s going on inside the office, and also inside my head.

For a lot of people, an editor’s job consists mostly of deciding whether a book is bought or not, so I thought I’d start with that perennial question, “How does a good book not get chosen?”  Or to put it another way, as many writers no doubt ask when another book is bought instead of theirs, “What was the editor thinking?”

Is it just a question of whether a book is good?  If it’s good, I buy it; if it’s not, I don’t?  I wish.  That would make things so much easier for me and for the author.  No, there are a lot of other considerations that go into the decision.  When I reject a manuscript, I’ll sometimes say in my letter that the manuscript was well-written but I still couldn’t buy it.  And I wonder if the author believes me.  But it’s true.  I’ve had to pass on a lot of really well-written novels over the years.  I wish I could have bought them all, but I couldn’t, for a variety of painful reasons.

The simplest reason is often that, even if a particular manuscript is great, there might be another one that’s still better.  My job is to find not only good manuscripts, but the best ones.  Leisure Books publishes two horror titles every month.  Twenty-four per year.  That’s what I have to work with, no more and no less.  Every year I have to find what I consider to be the twenty-four best books to put into those slots.  The really tricky part is that I did publish twenty-four titles last year, and pretty much all of those authors have a new book now that they’d really like to see me publish this year.

Editing a line of books is kind of like being a manager of a baseball team, with the writers as the players.  The success of the line depends on the success of the individual writers, who are, after all, the ones who do the work that their fans pay to see.  But I have to choose the best players and make sure they play at their highest level and make for a well-rounded team.  No baseball team, even the Yankees, can afford to buy every great player out there.  And they can’t buy too many of the same kind of player.  Just like no team wants only good pitchers or good outfielders, I can’t buy only good ghost stories or good extreme horror or good…whatever.  I need a nice mix.  So if I find myself overstocked with, say, subtle psychological horror at some point, and a writer or agent sends me another one, unless it’s absolutely fantastic I’ll pass. 

Also, just like a manager in baseball doesn’t ideally want a player who’ll be with them for just one game (or one season), I prefer writers who will continue to write and whose career I can build over the course of many books.  This means that many of those twenty-four slots this year will be filled by authors who wrote books last year.  The downside of this is I won’t have many open slots for newcomers.  Given the hundreds of submissions I see every year, that’s a lot of competition for just a few positions on the team.  So a lot of great potential players are sent home to try out for another team.

When I explain that I can only publish so many books each year, I’ve had authors say, “That’s OK, buy my book now and I can wait as long as it takes for you to publish it.”  That would be nice, but from a business standpoint it simply won’t work.  When I buy a manuscript, Leisure pays an advance.  If we don’t publish the book for two or three years, we don’t see any sales from it, and thus no money coming in for years after we’ve laid out the advance.  Not a good move financially.  Plus, if I get too many books sitting in my inventory, waiting to be published down the road, it prevents me from buying anything I may see for a while until I can work off that inventory.  And no publisher likes to close themselves off to submissions.

So let’s say for argument’s sake that a manuscript is really, really good, better than most of the manuscripts I’ve seen.  In fact it’s one of the top contenders for the few available slots in my list.  And it isn’t in a subgenre that I’ve published a lot of recently.  Clear sailing, right?  Close but no cigar.  There are still some things that can trip up a manuscript just before the finish line.  One of the most painful for me is simply bad timing, where I really love a book but I just bought a book with a very similar plot.  It happens and it kills me.  And I know it isn’t easy for the author either, because it isn’t his or her fault.  If I had seen the same manuscript two months earlier, I would have bought it and the other guy’s manuscript would have been rejected instead.  But I can’t publish two books with very similar plots, so the second one has to go.

I know.  Ouch.  It wasn’t the author’s fault, right?  But none of these things is the author’s fault.  (Assuming the manuscript is good.)  Is it the author’s fault that I have too many books in my inventory or that I simply don’t have an open slot in the immediate future?  Or that she’s written a vampire novel and I already published four vampire novels this year?  Or that his timing is just off?  No, the author did what he or she was supposed to do; write a really good manuscript.  I wish I could publish them all.  But I can’t.  I can only look through them all and pick what I think are not only the best ones but also the right ones.  Am I always right?  Not a chance.  And I know I’ve turned down a lot of great manuscripts that another house might snap up in a second, and it’s not because of anything the author did wrong.  That’s why it’s so painful to write those rejection letters.  (OK, maybe not as painful as it is to get them.)  And that’s why it’s so important for an author not to get discouraged, to keep trying, and keep submitting their work.  All of these factors outside of the author’s control can change.  If your timing was bad this time, maybe it’ll be better next time.  If my inventory is high today, maybe it’ll be lower in six months.  If your manuscript isn’t right for one house, it can easily be perfect for another.  But if you believe your work is good and you stop submitting it after a few rejections, you’ll never know how some of those factors might have changed.  And if you don’t give your work the best shot you can, that’s really painful.

Good dialogue can make a book really stand out.  But badly punctuated dialogue in a manuscript can really make an editor tear her hair out.  And I’m amazed at how often it comes up.

So for all writers out there–published and unpublished–a quick guide to getting it right:

When using a dialogue tag such as said, noted, replied, etc., a comma is used in place of a period before the closing quote.  Ex: “Let’s get busy,” she said.  In cases of questions or exclamations, the ? or ! goes inside the quotes and attribution is followed by a period.  Ex: “Can we please get busy now?” she asked.

When the dialogue is followed by a complete sentence without a tag, a period goes within the quotes. Ex: “Let’s get busy.” She gave him a lingering kiss.

When you have action without a tag interrupting dialogue, dashes are used outside the quotes.  Ex: “I really want to”–she nipped his lower lip–”get busy.”  

If the dialogue is interrupted with a tag, you just use regular ol’ commas.  Ex: “I really want to,” she said, “get busy.”

And this kind of dialogue is precisely why I edit and don’t write.

Rose Fox, editor extraordinaire at Publishers Weekly and cofounder of magazine’s Genreville blog, took some video of the authors at the Barnes & Noble mass signing a few weeks ago that featured Charles Ardai, Anna DeStefano, Leanna Renee Hieber and Jack Ketchum .  A full transcript of the video can be found here.

I especially love what Jack Ketchum says about getting to know his characters inside and out before he writes their story.  I think this is so important for authors.  I can’t tell you how many times I’ve read a manuscript and felt as though I didn’t really get the hero or heroine’s main personality until 2/3 of the way through.  It’s then a lot of work for the author to have to go back and layer that personality through from the beginning in a realistic way.

But it’s also really fun to see what inspires different writers and where the ideas for books like DARK LEGACY, HUNT AT THE WELL OF ETERNITY, COVER, and THE STRANGELY BEAUTIFUL TALE OF MISS PARKER come from.

I’ve been working on the back cover copy for the first book in a new paranormal series by Elisabeth Naughton.  It’s called MARKED, and it’s coming out in May 2010.  

I’m not one of those editors who’s always wanted to be a writer.  A blank page is no fun for me (unless it’s a brand-new notebook; love those!).  I find it much easier to work with something that already exists.  But at the same time, cover copy is immensely important.  If the cover image has done its job and gotten the reader to pick up the book, it’s up now up to me to make sure the story sounds interesting enough to make them want to buy it–or at least investigate further.  Sometimes cover copy comes to me in a rush, but more often it’s a process.   

So here’s a glimpse into that process, along with commentary in the brackets.  These are the same kinds of things authors should consider when writing their query letters.

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For nearly two hundred years he’d served his race because it was his duty as a descendent of Heracles, the greatest hero in Ancient Greece.  [Pulled from the ms.]

*

From the moment she saw him he walked into the club, Casey knew he was different. Men like that just didn’t exist in real life—silky shoulder-length hair, chest as wide as two of her side-by-side, and a predatory manner that just screamed dark and dangerous. And yet he’d cradled the blond woman he’d been after so tenderly. Casey ached to be held like that. Instead she was attacked by hellhounds.  [A little rough but generally decent – gets the reader a little in love with the hero (I hope), but they’ll wonder: who’s the blonde?  And I like the abrupt transition, but unfortunately it’s not actually true since he’s the one attacked and technically it’s by demons, not hellhounds.  Dang.]

*

[Playing with headlines]

THE GUARDIANS
THE GIRL [Demeaning?  But alliterative.]
THE PROPHECY [Got nothing with a G.]

*

There was unrest in the Underworld. Theron could feel it, the evil insidiously creeping sliding through the cracks into the mortal realm. As a Guardian, one of the last descendents of Hercules, it was his job to stop it.  [It’s a start, but now where do I go? Her POV?]

*

Theron knows what he has to do: kill the daemons, save the princess, rule the kingdom. His life is mapped out like some warped fairy tale. Or, way more appropriately, an ancient myth. After all, he’s a 200-year-old descendent of Hercules.

The human woman is also his duty. He has to find her and bring in her in for sacrifice. It’s all part of the save-the-princess thing. Problem is, he doesn’t really want the princess. He wants the human. Casey saved his life. Casey is his life. And he’ll die himself if that’s what it takes to protect her. [I kind of like the more casual tone, but what if it doesn’t sound dark enough? We’ve lost the part that makes the reader fall in love with the hero. What if I do a paragraph that intros each character for each book in the series?  Hmmm…]

*

THERON – Dark haired, duty bound and deceptively dangerous, he’s the leader of an elite group of guardians that protects the immortal realm. their realm and mortals from the threats of the Underworld. He can feel the unrest in the Underworld, the evil insidiously slipping out. And it’s his job to stop it.

Theron knows what he has to do: kill the daemons, save the princess, rule the kingdom. His life is mapped out like some warped fairy tale—or, more appropriately, an ancient myth. After all, he’s a 200-year-old descendent of Hercules.

Finding the human woman is also his duty. He has to bring in her in for sacrifice. It’s all part of the save-the-princess thing. Problem is, he doesn’t really want the princess. He wants the human. Casey saved his life. Casey is his life. And he’ll die himself if that’s what it takes to protect her. [A colleague was confused in thinking that the human and the princess were the same.  That’s no good.] 

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[Sometimes you just end up going back to the beginning.]

FINAL:

THERON – Dark haired, duty bound and deceptively deadly. He’s the leader of the Argonauts, an elite group of guardians that defends the immortal realm from threats of the Underworld.

From the moment he walked into the club, Casey knew this guy was different. Men like that just didn’t exist in real life—silky shoulder-length hair, chest impossibly broad, and a predatory manner that just screamed dark and dangerous. He was looking for something.  Her.

She was the one. She had the mark. Casey had to die so his kind could live, and it was Theron’s duty to bring her in. But even as a 200-year-old descendent of Hercules, he wasn’t strong enough to resist the pull in her fathomless eyes, to tear himself away from the heat of her body.

As war with the Underworld nears, someone will have to make the ultimate sacrifice.

Because of ongoing issues with the Dorchester message boards, we have postponed the query critique.  We’re going to relaunch it when we have brand new forums set up, so stay tuned.  And thanks for all your patience.

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